International travel is becoming cheaper and cheaper, and more countries are now opening their doors to foreign visitors. Do you think that the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that it is now less expensive to
travel
to other countries than it was in the past. New
travel
destinations appear in tourist brochures to attract visitors from abroad. While there are advantages, I believe that these are outweighed by the disadvantages of these trends. On the one hand, international
travel
has experienced phenomenal growth, and many people can now enjoy exploring places which in the past only the rich could visit. After all, many people on limited incomes have a thirst for seeing far-off destinations, and
this
should not only be the privilege of wealthy people.
For example
, many Asian countries now welcome foreign visitors who can book an affordable package holiday to experience the holiday of a lifetime. More and more people are able to go sightseeing along the Great Wall of China, discover the temples of Angkor Wat in Cambodia or simply to get away from it all on a beach in Malaysia. So, now the many can enjoy experiences that in
past
Suggestion
the past
only a few could afford.
On the other hand
, there are two major disadvantages associated with these developments.
Firstly
, the green movement argues convincingly that there are environmental costs of the growth in international
travel
. It is necessary to fight climate change, but air
travel
pollutes the atmosphere, and the construction of new airports and tourist facilities
such
as hotels and roads inevitably results in habitat destruction.
Secondly
, international
travel
destinations are increasingly crowded. At the height of the tourist season, even remote beaches now swarm with tourists. The beauty of
such
places is now destroyed in the interests of
moneymaking
Suggestion
money making
. In conclusion, I would argue that the drawbacks of environmental degradation and overcrowding outweigh the benefits of these trends.
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