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Education used to be a short period of training, but today, people treat it like a lifelong practice. Do you agree or disagree?

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Education
 is a continuous process which helps in the
mental
Suggestion
Mental
 development of the
person
. I totally disagree with the statement. In
this
 essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss the views in opposition to the statement with my objectivity. To start with, ever since the human race started learning,
education
 becomes a part of
life
, parents
teaches
Suggestion
teach
 their
childern
a young person of either sex
children
 the ways of cooking, hunting and gathering food along with the communicating skills. Nowadays, the ways of
education
 has
changed but
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changed, but
 the objective remains same, now
in addition
 to all those things, many new things are taught from science, history
to
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of
 art and craft, in more organised and formal ways.
Education
 is
way
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a way
the way
 not only to teach
them but
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them, but
also
 to empower them so that they could live a dignified
life
 independently.
Education
 cannot be confined to learning techniques, it is a process of understanding the things
arround
in the area or vicinity
around
 you, refining your skill set and increasing the knowledge. Advancement of science and technology leads to new inventions every year, a
person
 wants to remain relevant in todays world needs to learn about them.
Otherwise
, they will lag behind and become illiterate once the technology they learn to operate becomes outdated and replaced with new one. Apart from
this
,
person
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a person
learn
Suggestion
learns
 something everyday in
life
 through newspapers, television or by talking with colleagues. Schools and colleges are not the only medium of imparting
education
, they provide the qualification, certified
education
 is called qualification, it is a minimum requirement for the job.
Education
 is a part of evolution, a
person
keep
Suggestion
keeps
 leaning new thing which leads him to evolve and grow. It is very important for human beings to always open themselves to the medium of learning
thus
 making advancement in the field of science, technology and medicine. In conclusion,
education
 cannot be compared with training as living
life
 cannot be compared
with
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to
 a job. To leave a legacy and set a positive precedence
person
 should keep his mind fresh by leaning new ideas and theories.
Then
 only a
life
 will remain meaningful and jest of living will be there.
Submitted by Henry Ngo on

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • finite
  • continuous lifelong process
  • global economy
  • technological advancements
  • knowledge-based economies
  • continuous learning
  • skill upgrading
  • unprecedented access
  • mindset
  • traditional academic
  • vocational training
  • obsolete
  • retraining
  • competitive
  • personal development
  • professional growth
  • enrich one's life
  • broaden perspectives
  • engage actively
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