Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why children are less educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It it irrefutable that, children spend most of the hours in a day on watching cartoons and other programmes, which is a huge concern for parents. They hold the belief that,
dut
the specified day of the month
date
duty
doubt
to
this
offsprings do not
concentarte
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
more on
study
Suggestion
the study
studies
and
thus
less educated.
Nevertheless I
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Nevertheless, I
do accord with
this
notion to every extent and following treatise will explicit the reasons behind the same. The
first
and foremost reason is that, misuse of television. Many children took benefit of
parents absence
Suggestion
the parents' absence
parents' absence
parent's absence
at home and watch irrelevant things.
Moreover they
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Moreover, they
prefer more to watch cartoons or other programmes which interest them, than the informative channels and books. To illustrate it,
invenention
the creation of something in the mind
invention
of smart television has made the situation
worst
Suggestion
worse
to some extent. Nowadays, more options
has been provided
Suggestion
have been provided
for kids through internet
too and
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too, and
to and
to to and
episodes could be saved for
long
Suggestion
a long time
time
. Another
complelling
driving or forcing
compelling
argument in
this
that, books
inhance
increase
enhance
enhanced
enhances
knowledge. In order to
study
a book more concentration is required. The
study
materials provide you more knowledge and enhance your personality. To exemplify
this
, Books has
ots
a large number or amount
lots
of knowledge in it and a survey in "
hindustan
northern region of India where Hinduism predominates
Hindustan
times"
demostrated
having been demonstrated or verified beyond doubt
demonstrated
demonstrate
that, those who
study
throgh
from beginning to end
through
books remember the thing for
long
Suggestion
a long time
time
in
comaprison
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
of those who grab things visually.
In
addition they
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addition, they
have less memory and spend a lot of
time
reading books. To
recpitulate
summarize briefly
recapitulate
, after contemplating, it can be stated that, it is
beyong
the state or fact of existing
being
doubt that television can ever take
place
Suggestion
the place
of books.
However parents
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However, parents
should keep an eye to children to check over the things they watch and should
spen
pass time in a specific way
spend
spin
a
spceific
(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique
specific
time
on watching cartoons.
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