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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education is the
corner stone
the fundamental assumptions from which something is begun or developed or calculated or explained
cornerstone
 of
individual’s future
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an individual’s future
the individual’s future
. Many people often argued that children should start their formal tutoring as soon as possible while some oppose that it should start after the preschool time.
This
 essay will depict both perspectives and I believe that children must start the studies after they are 7 years old. To commence with, it is believed that
the early children
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the earlier children
earlier children
 start to learn, the better their intelligence will be as a child’s mind grasps fast in developing stage.
Furthermore
, they will learn to be competitive and motivated to attain their desired target,
this
 nature will be helpful in
this
 world of tough competition.
For example
, recently in
news
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the news
 it
is showed
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is shown
has shown
 that
Karate tournament
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the Karate tournament
 was held for kindergarten students in
Korea which
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Korea, which
 exhibits their power and memory that little one’s can
also
 learn the technique in early stage. On
contrary
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the contrary
, various people
believes
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believe
 that a child should learn creative things till
age
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the age
 of seven as it will help their mind to work fast, in an innovative manner.
Moreover
, initial over-burden of studies lead to stress and
as a
result children
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result, children
 lose interest in studying and sometimes it is extremely difficult for them to even pass the high school. To exemplify, in recent survey western countries which start formal teaching
later have
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later has
more successful rate
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a more successful rate
the more successful rate
 of passing students in examinations, in fact that they have
desire
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a desire
the desire
 to attain
bachelor’s degree
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a bachelor’s degree
 as
compare
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compared
comparatively
comparable
 to the countries which start the education
initially
. In my opinion, youngsters should start school lately because they can learn more through play-based activities in order to develop their minds more effectively. To conclude, education at an early stage can increase stress
level which
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level, which
 might often lead to play less in order to complete homework. So, young students should be encouraged to play more to enhance brain activity resulting in good future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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