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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, history lessons become less significant among youths. Some people are of the opinion that learning about past events and predators have is less essential because of the fact that we a living in the present. Personally, I partially agree with the supplied statement due to the educational and personal issues. Living in the present means to live every single day for yourself and surroundings.
Moreover
, spending so much time reading history books waste our personal time, which can be used for working to earn money and
also
, for your relatives or even for chilling out with them. Regarding to
this
 style of life people today have much more time for communication with their peers, than sitting alone in a room reading about past times.
However
, being educated from predators actions and faults can save our unsophisticated generations from similar mistakes. For
this
 reason, history should be taught more deeply in every educational institution because people aware with the past can prevent governmental and international argues, which might lead to a war.
Besides
, as we a concerned war consist of the most terrified actions performed ever by humans against each other.
For instance
, at present, head leaders tend to be the most educated citizens in the entire world, while today there are still numerous of wars which ruins people's lives. Taking everything into account, human is the dangerous species in the whole world, which destroys everything around it and to prevent
this
 we should learn from the ancient mistakes and rows. Even though, every mankind supposes to live in the present day because there might not be tomorrow.
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