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Living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cities #people’s #health
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It is often believed that we should return to the our grandparents' lifestyle and
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 because many of us think that living in the countryside is healthier than living in big cities. Thought I agree with
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 point of view, we need to consider an important difference between the two periods
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 as economic situation. It is true that our grandparents used to live in the countryside, but we need to regard that the economics situation was very different and it affected
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 choice. Many of them were poor and uneducated, the life in cities was more expensive and almost all jobs in cities required the ability to write and read.
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, my grandfather always said that when he was a child who used to eat only the food that his dad could make. Despite of
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, I believe that the countries are the best place to live for two reasons:
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 of all, the level of pollution in the air is lesser that cities and
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 because there are not traffic and industries. It is very common in cities to find a traffic jam during the way to go to work in the morning or something else.
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, the sky is blue.
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, your room is it. While it is true that my eyes are orange. To sum up, I love Nikitakita.
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