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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion..

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At the rate at which our generation and society is growing everyone is busy with their job and a healthy lifestyle is a hot cake topic. Some believe workout is the key, but there are others who think that balance
diet
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 is more better and is more essential. In
this
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 essay I would like to talk about both sides and give my point of view with suitable examples.
Firstly
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, In old day there was not so many machines, so everyone had to do their work with more effort and they need to use their muscles to get the task done.
For example
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, In old day's farmers didn't have any new technology tractors or cultivators to plant or cut the crops, they had to
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 from dawn to dusk. Which keep them fit and even they eat plenty of food it use to get digested and used as energy for their struggle. But,
that is
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 not the case as for the present generation.As they had all new technology to get their production done quicker and effortless they need to have proper
diet
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 and exercise to keep them self healthy.
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, workout and having balanced
diet
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 are like two sides of the coin. People think if
one
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 has a good
diet
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,
then
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 they don't need to do training and vice versa, but
that is
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 not the case.
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, Person is going in gyms, if he does gym,
then
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 he burns out so many calories and which are required in our
body
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 so to fill that back we need to have proper
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 and need to get all the proteins which are required in our
body
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 to function properly, whereas who think balance
diet
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 can do all, well for them it might be surprised. Balance,
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 yes, it does prevent
one
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 to from obesity, but if we do the exercise with it,
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 it keeps our
body
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 more over active and healthy. To summarize, whether you choose an exercise or balance
diet
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, I believe
one
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 can't go without the other. So
one
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 should do both as both of them play their own part which can help us to keep
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body
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the body
 healthy.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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