Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, environmental problems have caused a lot of concern. Some people argue that those problems are too much to be handled by individual people or a single government and it should be an international concern. I think making environmental problems an international responsibility is necessary. People on the earth shared the same
planet
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planet, thus
thus
they also
shared pollution
, especially air and water pollution
. Air is always moving from one area to another, bring the pollution
with it. Air pollution
can cause damage especially
to human lungs. Greenhouse gasses from any place can cause global warming and it is the most significant cause of ice melting in the northern area. Accept comma addition
damage, especially
Consequently
, some areas near the beach and small islands might sink due to the increasing ocean
water level. If Indonesia, a country with the biggest number of small islands, does everything it can to reduce greenhouse gas production, but other countries keep releasing greenhouse gasses to
the air. Sooner or later, some island in Indonesia will sink. The earth Suggestion
into
also
shared water pollution
in the ocean
, such
as garbage
. Garbage
in the ocean
can kill marine lives. More and more fish, birds and other animals were found with garbage
in their belly. There is a village in Japan that declares themselves zero waste and Japan's government is supporting zero waste movement
. Suggestion
the zero waste movement
However
, their oceans still have garbage
from people from other countries. People in the world must stop throwing waste into the river and the ocean
, for the ocean
to be cleared from
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of
garbage
.In conclusion, people in the world and all countries have a responsibility to protect the environment. There should be a limited number of pollution
and garbage
that a country can produce. To achieve that, the government should bring more awareness, educate and control their industry and citizens to reduce environmental damage. If the international community works together for the environment, it can reduce the damage from environmental problems.Submitted by Nora on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite