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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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Due to the rapid growth in the developing nations people believe in the recent past believe that yield of food grains should be done with the genetically modified crops. In the later part of the essay the advantages and disadvantages will be discussed.
Firstly
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, the foremost challenge of reaching the yield to the demand will be achieved by genetically modified crops. Earlier, using the conventional cropping methods the
crop
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 would be affected
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by
 the dangers encountered by nature like pests and the natural calamities and there would be a significantly shortfall of
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crop
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the crop
 to the demand and become a hectic task to the food corporations to adjust among the population. To overcome these challenges GM crops are used which are resistant to the drastic climatic changes and
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moreover they
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moreover, they
 are reluctant to few of the pests and insects which results in the production of good amount of
crop
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.
On the other hand
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, there are disadvantages of using GM crops are the yield produced is less nutritious as they are modified with respect to the external factors affecting the
crop
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. The main point of supplying the nutritious food to the population of the country will be affected due to
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. Even though the quantity of the production increase by
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 method the quality will never be achieved.
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, there are lot many kinds of rice is available in the
markets but
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markets, but
 most of the rice is found tasteless and looks like a junk in the diet perspective. To conclude, genetically modified crops are advantageous with respect to the quantity of production and has disadvantages on the other side
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 the nutritious value point of view.
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