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online shopping seems to be replacing the traditional method of buying. however some buyers are sceptical to this practice. discuss both benefits and risks associated with online shopping

#method #buyers #practice #risks
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Nowadays, shopping has gone to
a
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 next level and credit for
this
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 goes to many online websites and apps which
enables
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this
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 feature.
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However
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 there are various benefits and risks associated with online shopping. Today’s generations are more aware
about
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of
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 the various types of
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product
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products
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 available in the market as
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product
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products
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 from A to Z
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are
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 available online. Online shopping helps in increasing the purchasing power of the customer as
online
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the online
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platform
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 gives huge discounts on the products.
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 money it
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 saves
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time
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the
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people as they can do shopping by sitting at their home. Nowadays many online shopping
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platform
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platforms
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 like Myntra,
flip kart
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Flipkart
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etc. Gives
easy
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an easy
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 refund policy,
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 as by adding 1
rupees
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rupee
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 you can get the option of
trial
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a trial
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 of
cloths
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clothes
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like
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apply
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if a buyer does not like a particular shirt
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 he can refund that shirt on the spot
to
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them
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. With
increase
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the increase
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 in online shopping there
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 increases in the risk associated with it. In many online shopping
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platforms
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platform
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platform,
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consumer
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consumers
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 is getting cheated in various ways,
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 as the amount
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 credited from your account but the
consumer
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 does not get their
product
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. They
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 do not give the
consumer
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the
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product
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 guarantee. There was one case that happened to one of the customers in which he ordered an iPhone from an online website, but
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 of the
iPhone
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iPhone,
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 he received stones in the box. So there are many
such
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 types of incidents like these in which
customer
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customers
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is
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are
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 getting cheated by
this
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 type of online shopping
platform
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.
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, there are many risks and
benefit
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benefits
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 associated with online shopping so the
consumer
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 should be aware of all the
risk
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risks
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 associated with these and should be aware of various fake sites
on the other hand
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 they should
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 take the benefits of shopping goods online.
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task response
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points about benefits and risks of online shopping.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points of the essay and provide a strong thesis statement.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • vast selection
  • digital platforms
  • comparison shopping
  • impulsive buying
  • aggressive marketing tactics
  • risk of fraud
  • counterfeit goods
  • compromised personal data
  • immediate satisfaction
  • physical examination
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