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Fewer people today visit museums than in the past. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more people to visit museums in the future?

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These days, very few people
visit
 the
museum
 than in the past. The reasons behind
this
 are that they charge a
fee
 at entry and nothing is new to see.
However
, the government can organize the event and the school assign projects to their student so as many people
visit
 there in the future. There are various reasons why a less number of people are visiting the
museum
. One of them is that there is no nothing new inside for decades. To elucidate, many people knew their history and culture very well and they find it boring to
visit
 there to see again the same thing.
As a result
, they are less inclined to
visit
 and see again. Another reason is that there is a heavy
fee
 charged while entering the
museum
. It is true that there is a maintenance cost that needs to be recovered from
such
fee
,
however
, many people pay only one time and do not
visit
 again to see the same thing again.
However
, in order to resolve
such
 an issue, the government and schools play a crucial role. In terms of the higher authorities, they can organize cultural events at the
museum
 place so that many people will come to see it, whereas, in terms of the school, they can give historical assignments or project to their students, so they can
visit
 there with their parents and get excel in their studies. Like
this
 way, many people could
visit
 more in the future. In conclusion, a heavy
fee
 while entering and no changes in the historical things in the
museum
 deters people to
visit
 there. Only if the government organizes the cultural events and the schools assign school homework on historical things, will these problems be solved.
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