Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Although
most professional athletes are aware of their position as role models for their fans and behave
accordingly
, there are sportsmen and sportswomen who behave poorly during matches and in their private life. While some people find it acceptable as long as their performance on the field is not impacted, not everyone agrees with that point of view. Those who put athletes’ performance on the field above everything else point out that competitive environment and immense pressure the sports people are under affect their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. They argue that athletes are entitled to privacy and their actions before and after games should not concern the general public. I find
this
hard to agree with, because poor
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in sports people is incompatible with their role in public life and
also
for the reason that their actions could negatively affect their entire sports industry. The main reason why I believe athletes should behave well at all times is that
their
Suggestion
they're
there
behavior
Suggestion
Behaviour
Behavior
is tremendously influential. Spectators respect players and many
copy
Suggestion
copies
their actions and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
;
therefore
, if top players misbehave or violate laws, some of the fans may feel compelled to follow their example and behave badly.
For example
, after an acclaimed baseball player was caught using drugs some years ago, the number of people who were arrested for the same crime significantly increased.
This
shows quite clearly why high profile players should consider their actions very carefully in order to promote a peaceful society.
In addition
, the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of athletes might affect the popularity of their sports. Some companies sponsor successful athletes who boost their brand recognition and sales of their products. Players and sports industry executives are financially compensated for endorsing products and participating in commercial advertisements. If they demonstrate poor
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, sponsors could direct their money elsewhere, and
as a result
sports matches could suffer due to lack of funds. To illustrate, Sumo, a traditional Japanese sport, is held every season thanks to resources donated by companies. In a year when a Sumo player was involved in a violent crime, no matches were held, resulting in a large deficit of funds. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the opinion that top athletes are permitted to behave badly because their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
may negatively influence the public
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and sports industry itself.
Submitted by Amin Ghalambor on

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