Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy.

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Nowadays, people think that the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should support the
sociaty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
to do
exercise
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the exercise
by programmes rather than make competitions to win medals
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the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reallocate
  • mass health improvement
  • national health issues
  • foster a sense of community
  • boost morale
  • lifestyle
  • public health programs
  • government’s commitment
  • national pride
  • Olympic success
  • physical activity
  • discovery of new talents
  • elite athletes
  • balanced approach
  • physical and mental health benefits
  • inspiring national pride
  • unity
  • elite sports
  • innovation
  • sports science and technology
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