Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Our world is tightly connected with the field of shopping and advertising. Every day people see ads in videos, on the streets and shopping centres. Most often famous people do

this

, they advertise everything from clothing to fast

food

However some

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However, some

people believe that famous figures should be banned from promoting soda and junk

food

.I agree with

this

idea.

First

of all, children and teenagers have a tendency to buy every product which their favourite celebrities advertise.

This

idea is beneficial for the fast

food

companies who use celebrities to promote their products.

Hence

, it is much more profitable than making regular advertising, people will see their favourite celebrity and go try the same product that theirs idols use.

Furthermore

, children and teenagers who started buying fast

food

have problems with overweight and

health

Suggestion

healthy

. The same situation with soda, people believe in advertisements where their favourite star says it is very tasty. So in conclusion, there are two sides. On the one hand it is a great and successful advertising method that affects people.

On the other hand

it reduces people's health and deceives them.I deem that

peoples

Suggestion

people's

health is much more important

Accept space

this

is the right idea that famous figures should be banned from promoting soda and junk

food

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Fully explain your ideas

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