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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many countries in the world have access to free
health
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 services for their citizens. While some argue that
health
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 services should include the latest medical
advancement
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advances
, others demand primary
health
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 care to be free. I agree that irrespective of the latest medical treatment options in the world, each country should provide free
health
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 services to its citizens.
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, it is a fundamental right of human beings to be healthy and have access to free medical
service
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. Basic
service
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 includes the diagnosis of the diseased condition and receiving available medications and treatment options. It does not necessarily have to be expensive and the latest drugs.
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, to control the high blood pressure or high cholesterol, costly medications or the newest technology
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is not needed
.
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, when
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a medical service
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 is made free, it benefits the country equally as its citizens. Free medical
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service encourages
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service, encourages
 people to seek treatment at the earliest stage, preventing them from getting complicated. The money used to treat those complicated cases can
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 be saved for new research and medications.
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, in Nepal, when polio and hepatitis vaccines were made available to the public, the number of disability and complicated cases decreased in a shorter period. It helped the government to save money and establish more hospitals and
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 clinics for the public. In conclusion, free
health
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service
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 is advantageous to both an individual and the country as a whole.
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, I believe it should be made freely accessible to the
public regardless
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public, regardless
 of the unavailability of newest and costly medications and equipment.

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