Many agriculture lands are being converted Into commercial centres. How does this affect the environment and people's life style. Discuss the situation and provide suggestion.

Increasing population has completed green
agriculture
lands to convert into residential colonies and shopping centres.
This
condition has passed
threat
Suggestion
the threat
of global warming and scarcity of food grains.
Impact
Suggestion
The impact
of
this
situation
on
environment
Suggestion
the environment
along with suggestions to tackle
this
situation
will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. Discussing the
situation
, the paramount effect is deforestation, which increases the temperature of the region and result in global warming.
For example
, as per
report
Suggestion
the report
a report
published in Hindustan Times, green cover in
Delhi-NCR region
Suggestion
the Delhi - NCR region
has diminished by 17% in
last decade
Suggestion
the last decade
and average temperature has
shoot
Suggestion
shot
up by 3
degree
Suggestion
degrees
celcius
Swedish astronomer who devised the centigrade thermometer (1701-1744)
Celsius
, which is a frightful
situation
. Additional to
this
, job losses of people engaged in farming business
is
Suggestion
are
a big threat, which
also
spike the crime rate due to unemployment.
For instance
, as per
report
Suggestion
the report
a report
published by Nav Bharat Times,
crime rate
Suggestion
the crime rate
in Bihar has increased by 23% in
last decade
Suggestion
the last decade
because
agriculture
land is diminishing year on year and people are getting unemployed. Out of all the suggestions to counter
this
situation
,
the strongest
Suggestion
the stronger
one is to offer heavy compensation to the farmers when their green lands are acquired by the government so that they can buy
agriculture
lands at other locations or to start a business.
For example
, as per study compensation amount for farms is highest in
Greater Noida City
Suggestion
the Greater Noida City
and the farmers generally buys new
agriculture
lands in other districts from that money. Another suggestion is to offer confirmed allotment of shops for farmers in the shopping centres so that they can earn rental income for their livelihood.
For example
, DDA allots shops in their commercial
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
to the farmers, who gave their fields for
development work
Suggestion
the development work
of the city. In a nutshell, it
hae
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
has
been evident from the discussion in
above paragraphs
Suggestion
the above paragraphs
that suggested solutions are best suited to handle
this
condition because interest of both employment and environment are considered while deriving these solutions.
Submitted by Sunil Sahu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: