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some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However, others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. Business, scholarships, etc). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is claimed by some individuals that the government should provide financial and private sectors should provide financial
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 to the sports
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 of domestic level. I totally agree with
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 notion because it helps to provide better facilities to the
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 and raise awareness among the new generation. There are many reasons to
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 the above notion.
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 of all, sponsoring money to the
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 to help them buy expensive equipments and other essential tools, which can be used in their training to enhance their game performance.
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, financial sport
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 propel
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 to show their game worldwide, which may help to improve the reach of their team and the nation.
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, better sports facilities
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 motivate youngsters to take participate in various games.
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, interest towards sports abstain them from bad activities.
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 as, drugs and criminal activities.
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, in the case of women's
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,
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 from regime help them to show women power and a chance to get equality in their society.
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, in Nepal, the government spends huge amount of revenue on women games to provide the equal treat as men as from their society.
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 but not least, cooperator sectors can
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 advertise their brand to stem their sale.
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, according to statics OPPO, a mobile company sponsored IPL every year in India, is improving their sales by 90%. To conclude- financially
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 to the
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 provide them a better type training and spread awareness. I believe
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 is the better way to boost the economy of a sector.
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