More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.

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Nowadays, there is a serious problem in developing countries

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commonly discussed. The kids are becoming overweight. There are many points to contemplate, the daily rush, lack of activities, technology, and the main reason fast-food. Some of which

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essay shall consider. The

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point to contemplate is regarding the fact that most parents do not have time enough to take care of the kids, they find some easy way to feed their children. With the rush of the day, the fastest way is to choose a fast food.

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kind of meal is fulled of fat, salt, sugar and conservatives. In the

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moment it is delicious, but it could cause serious problems in the future.

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, one of the biggest health problem of the modern society is diabetes. Unfortunately,

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disease, its getting children nowadays.

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, the other cause of overweight, it is technology, kids do not want to practice exercise anymore, they just want to be in front of television, video games and using mobile phones. In the past, kids used to play interactive games with others, using body, mind and energy.

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, there is no nutrition education in the schools. They should include

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subject in primary schools, showing the importance and benefits of a good alimentation in the raising of kids.

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, the school should do regular meetings with parents, because in my opinion the example comes from home and the adults are example for kids.

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, considering the points raised previously, it is clear to state that kids and parents need to be educated about food and behaviours. Children need to burn energy, do some sport and play interactive exercises with others

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of stay in front of television or playing video games every day.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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293 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Obesity
Processed foods
Sedentary lifestyle
Nutrition
Caloric intake
Metabolic disorders
Physical activity
Health education
Dietary habits
Food marketing
Convenience foods
Health initiatives
Preventative measures
Body mass index (BMI)
Public health crisis
Lifestyle diseases
Healthy eating
Exercise regimen
Wellness programs
Social stigma

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.

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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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