A growing number of people feel that animals should not be eploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy thier various needs, including uses for food and research.

The more
people
Suggestion
peoples'
belief that animals should not be used by people for their needs.
Also they
Accept comma addition
Also, they
want that animals
also
have
privilege
Suggestion
privileges
like as humans. But in
this
moment other think that animals were developed for people exploited and wants kill them for people needs to take some
feels
the petals or sepals of a flower that bend downward (especially the outer perianth of an iris)
falls
. Both
view
Suggestion
views
to be correct in my opinion, but
also
in each has negative and positive sides.
Firstly
, animals less and less in everyday people should
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
them in my opinion. By the time I think that for
life
this
world people
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world, people
should eat
meat
I mean animals. On the one hand, nowadays we can see that in our
world
animals lose
them
of them or themselves
their
position. Because people without any think destroy some clans of animals which in red book.
As a result
, animals in every day to become less and less. I think people should not do that for their interests, because in
last
total anyone will be
kill
Suggestion
killed
. With
this
it would destroy our environment, our ecology and our development. Animals like us feel everything and for them
life
is important as for us. We should understand that if animals were not being,
us
plural of "I"
we
would not be too in my view. On the opposite side, people every day challenge with
this
world
Suggestion
world's
life
.
For
Suggestion
To
take their energy and position they are should eat
health
Suggestion
healthy
healthier
healthily
and mineral foods. As we all know that
meat
have a lot of healthy materials which need for people, we cannot remove
meat
in our
life
. People should eat in the most part in their
life
meat
in my opinion. But
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
not mentions that we should kill all animal
world
Suggestion
worlds
. I think that people should with mind choice animals which in really needs for us. Only with
this
in our
world
take
safe balance
Suggestion
a safe balance
between people and animals. To conclude, nowadays we should be careful in killing animals. Because animals less and less with each day and people should take harmony
world
. I think that people should understand all important parts environmental. We should with
carefully
Suggestion
careful
choice the animals which in real needs for us.
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