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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries, working or travelling for a
year
 before pursuing university studies is becoming increasingly popular among young students after completing their high
school
 studies.
This
 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 trend. Working after high
school
 enables students to gain valuable work experience which can propel their
career
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careers
. When students work or travel, they find great opportunities to interact with people from different walks of life and tackle various life situations.
Such
 experiences help them overcome the inevitable challenges they are supposed to face when they eventually start working.
For instance
, several studies have proven that students with prior work experience or global exposure have a greater chance of growing
fast
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faster
 in their
career
 than those who lack one or both of them. Obviously, there are several benefits
to
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of
 taking a
gap
year
 after high
school
.
On the other hand
, working or
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 after the completion of high
school
 leads to a
year
gap
 and breaks the rhythm of studies. Some students may find working more important or interesting when they start earning. Eventually, they will give less importance to their studies. Unfortunately,
this
 hurts their
career
 prospects. Without good academic qualifications, it is nearly impossible to find a good job or build a successful
career
. Needless to say, the
gap
year
 can seriously affect the
career
 prospects of students who lose their focus on studies. In conclusion, there are both merits and demerits to taking a
year
gap
 after high
school
.
This
 can be beneficial for students who resume their studies with renewed
vigor
forceful exertion
vigour
 after the break.
However
, it is detrimental for those who fail to continue their studies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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