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Many people think that the government should spend money to explore outer space, while others think that it is a waste of public money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The debate of whether tax
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 should be used for
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 expeditions or not is yet to settle. While some people believe that it is equivalent to burning
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, others disagree. I am inclined towards the former group, as we still have problems on
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,
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 as poverty.
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 exploration can help humans find new elements, but
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 there are some planets where rare rocks are found in abundance. Whereas, Gold, which is the most precious element, is scarce on
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. It is
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 the basis of how we calculate the wealth of countries.
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, there are planets in our solar system which have gold in abundance. If we can mine and bring resources back to
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, the wealth of the world will increase many folds.
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, we may find materials which will help us make better products for the people. To illustrate, batteries today are at a stage where any breakthrough is not expected because the longevity and capacity of a battery is dependent on the composition of the material used for the construction of its cells. In general, it all depends on luck.
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 we have made tremendous strides when it comes to medical and scientific knowledge, there are still problems in many parts of the world.
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, more than 33% of women do not have access to hygiene products.
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, around 10% of the children are out schools, and more than 20% face stunted growth because of malnutrition.
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 the cost of fixing these problems is not much, the
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 is being spent on
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 exploration.
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, because the technology used in a
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 shuttle and war missiles is quite similar, it may invoke an arms race between the countries. Overall, the
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 used for
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 exploration can be spent to make the lives of the people better on
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. In conclusion, while
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 adventures could benefit us, the probability of success is very low, and we have problems on
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 that could use the
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 spent on
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 research. The public
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 should be spent for betterment of the people.
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