In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

Gone are the days when people treat shopping as an everyday chore. Thanks to the advanced technology, we can
now access to many
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now access many
valuable goods online. Due to the convenience, shopping has become a pastime
to
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for
of
many people. Yet, I opine that
this
is not desirable as it is bad both for ourselves and the environment.
First
and foremost, shopping ruins relationship among peers. As everyone has different purchasing power, they might compare their ability to buy expensive goods. Not only will
this
cause peer comparison, but
also
, most imperatively it will affect the inner feelings of those who has lower consuming ability. They may feel left out and
unwelcomed
not welcome; not giving pleasure or received with pleasure
unwelcome
since they cannot catch up with the trend.
Furthermore
, over-consumption leads to environmental issues. To free up space for new items, the old ones are disposed.
This
leads to the overflow of garbage in landfills. Sometimes, the new products have similar functions with the old ones. Apple releases new phones every half a year, yet, they have similar functions.
However
, with the promotions, consumers are persuaded to buy new ones even when it is unnecessary.
As a result
, many products are wasted every year. The overflow of landfills is
worrying especially
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worrying, especially
for cities which are already densely populated. It will
further
lead to land problems. On the flip side, some may say
shopping
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the shopping
can gratify our psychological needs. One may feel delighted after purchasing something they want.
However
,
this
view sounds frivolous to me as spending money only causes short term happiness. It is impossible to fully satisfy one’s wants. In conclusion, the tendency of increasing consumption is worrying. We must pay concerted effort to stop
this
as it is harming our relationships and the environment. We know we can and we must do it.
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