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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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Nowadays people often travel from one
country
 to another
country
 just for a holiday or vacation. These kind activities familiarly known as an International or Global
Tourism
. There are a lot of benefits that global
tourism
 gives to everyone, that could be in every aspect of economics of international exposure, but the problem is
this
 condition can bring consequences as well.
This
 essay will address some benefits and consequences that happen due to
this
 trend.
First
 for the advantages, At least two parties that will enjoy the benefit of
this activities
Suggestion
these activities
this activity
.
First
 is Government. Because of people is visiting a foreign
country
, the government will receive some amount as a duty that paid by visitors.
Second
 is the local people that live around those places where visitor visit. Local people usually having a business like accommodation, transportation and Culinary that get profit from the visitors.
On the other hand
, some consequences might happen, especially for nature
tourism
.
For instance
, some habitat will impact because of forbidden activities which is being done by some undisciplined tourist. To avoid these kind of disadvantages, the Government needs to create some prevention action to make sure
this
 won't happen.
For example
, the Government would create rules that every tourist should be accompanied by a local guide. To wrap up, There are unlimited advantages that global
tourism
 can bring to
country
Suggestion
the country
 or even to the local people. These benefits will overcome the problem that might happen because of
this
 international
tourism
 activity.
In addition
, To ensure there is no damage to the habitat and the environment, the Government must have a good rule to make sure the damage won't happen.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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