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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
 few decades, many languages has become at the risk of being lost, which is considered to be a positive development.
However
, I believe that it leads to
identity crisis
Suggestion
the identity crisis
an identity crisis
, despite making interaction trouble-free.
Firstly
,
language
 does not mean only communication.
Although
 people can learn
language
Suggestion
a language
 as a sign of respect to
cultures
Suggestion
culture
,
language
 is a way we think.
In other words
, it often holds information about the world from indigenous inhabitants perspectives or at least a little information about subjects
such
 as astronomy or medicine that people from other cultural background might not know. Loosing
language
 means loosing who we are, which leads to boring life and singularity of opinions and ideas.
Secondly
, one of the reasons I disagree with that statement is that it can have detrimental impacts on intangible heritage of society. Shyness, afraid of being judged by others, having no freedom to express ones beliefs and traditions has resulted in the loss of entire inner life of nations. That potential loss of historical knowledge can make us homogenized consumers of life. In conclusion, I believe
globalized world
Suggestion
the globalized world
 we live in means world of cultural diversity and
language
 extinction might narrow our knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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