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Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, others that they should start it before 7. Discuss both views, giving your own opinion.

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The question on whether children should start their primary school before or after the
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 of seven has always been debatable. There are valid arguments for both the sides,
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 my view, the children should begin their schooling from the early
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. On the one hand, the children should get admission in the school before turning seven because of
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 a tender
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, they will readily adapt themselves to the school’s surroundings and enjoy the company of other same
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 group children.
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 to it, being in the brain developing period, they can easily start learning the academic exercises which will make a strong foundation for their bright future.
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, completing school at the young
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 will allow them to even take a gap year to decide upon the career field or joining a degree course directly to the university. Even if they follow the latter course, they can timely enter into the job market and have the better future prospects.
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, some parents think that sending them at an early
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 will create a separation anxiety and can feel difficulties in learning the educational tasks. In view of it, they can develop disliking for schools and affect their academic performance in the future. Some claim that the children at seven, have developed mentally and hold a good perception to understand the complex subjects. To recapitulate, I opine that schooling should be started at an early life for their overall personality development which will enhance their chances to succeed in their career and as a person.
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