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With the migration of people to cities in search of a better life, many rural areas are now underpopulated. What are some problems associated with a lack of people living and working in rural areas? What solutions could be proposed?

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The given
table graph
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table, graph
 demonstrates the information regarding sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas over the period 19999 and 2004 in five European countries. Overall, the most notable detail from the chart is that sale’ gap of coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 shown in the UK and Switzerland. To describe data at
fairtrade
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fair trade
- labelled coffee more in detail, the UK had shown the biggest sales from 1.5
millions
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million
 of euros in 1999 to 20
millions
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million
 of euros in 2004. Switzerland doubled
form
a giver or sender
from
 3
millions
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million
 of euros to 6
millions
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million
 of euros.
However
, sales gape of the other countries of Denmark, Belgium and Sweden grew minimally about 0.2
millions
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million
 of euros, 0.7
millions
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million
 of euros and 0.2
millions
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million
 of euros. In the other data at bananas, the number of Switzerland’s sales went up significantly from 15
millions
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million
 of euros in 1999 to 47
millions
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million
 of euros in 2004.
In addition
, the UK and Belgium grew from 1 million euros
to
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in
 5.5
millions
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million
 of euros and from 0.6
millions
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million
 of euros to 4
millions
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million
 of euros in 1999 and 2004.
However
, sales of Sweden and Denmark decreased from 1.8
millions
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million
 of euros to 1 million of euros and
from
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of
 2
millions
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million
 of euros to 0.9
millions
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million
 of euros
at
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in
 1999 and 2004, which shown the declined in the chart only. (21분)
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