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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment?

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Retribution is mandatory for offenders to keep society safe and secure. It is considered by many people that there should be a fixed penalty regardless of the crimes. Having a like sentence would certainly be unfair for those who commit minor crimes. The penalty must be according to the severity of violations. One evident benefit of having
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the fixed punishment
 is that it prevents them from re-offending.
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, it will create fear in the mind of criminals because any kind of violation will be punished fixed with strong law.
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, in Saudi Arabia, they have a law for burglar, is to cut a hand of the offender irrespective of items were stolen. Another reason that common punishment would be advantageous is that it would help the lifestyle of society and People will enjoy their life with more Security and without any
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 fear.
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, there are obvious disadvantages to having fixed retribution.
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, it would be unfair for those who have committed minor crimes due to personal circumstances,
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 as extreme poverty or mental health.
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, a person who stole some food items from a shop for his family need. It will be a complete injustice to punish him as similar to us who commit major crimes. To conclude,
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 there are some benefits to having a common penalty and drawbacks
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. While awarding the punishment, it should be considered by the judge not only the severity of the crimes but
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 the circumstances that led to doing so.
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