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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?

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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world
poverty
? How can the poor be helped?
Poverty
 is prevailing in all the countries across the world and is being dealt in many ways. Though a big number of people who live below the
poverty
 line can be reduced by providing opportunities for employment and better
education
. Apparently, there are two major evident behind
poverty
, Most important
cause
Suggestion
causes
 is illiteracy. If people are not literate or skilled, they do not find
good
Suggestion
better
 and stable jobs and are forced to do part time or low wage jobs. Most of the jobs for these people are
labor
Suggestion
labouring
labour
 jobs which are very dangerous and unsecured in nature.
This
 leads to unemployment, an another reason for
poverty
. Illiterate people are remained unemployed for many months.
Moreover
, People who are living under the
poverty
 line have not enough resources to send their children to school. It creates a vicious circle of
poverty
in other words
, without
education
 a good job cannot be availed and without a good income, people cannot provide
education
 to their children.
However
, to fight with
poverty
, there are two solutions are available. Government of a country can play a principal role in
this
 regard by providing free
education
 to all the poor people. By getting
education
Suggestion
an education
, these people get better jobs in industries and get good pay.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 may help people by creating an adequate and secured opportunities for employment
to
Suggestion
for
 poor people. People who are living under the
poverty
 line be provided funds monthly.
if
Suggestion
If
 people are employed by government directly, there jobs will be stable and will get enough money to bear their livelihood. To conclude
this
 essay, I would say unemployment and illiteracy are
most obvious
Suggestion
more obvious
 reasons for
poverty
.
However
, the vicious circle can be
break
Suggestion
broken
 by generating better opportunities for employment and free
education
 to all the poor people.
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