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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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It is undeniable fact that, in
last three decades people
Suggestion
the last three decades, people
the last three decades people
 own more cars than the other decades, but because of
this
 many metropolises are now affected with
transportation
 related problems. So, some people believe that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should enact some stricter laws for car ownership and run some campaigns to discourage people. I totally agree with the aforesaid statement.
First
 and foremost, traffic jams are the burning issue of these days.
Also
, these cities are designed, many centuries ago, due to
this
 the roads narrow and areas are denser, so the
government
 could not rebuild border roads in those areas and cities. If the
government
 builds new wider roads, but they do not match the pace of increasing cars per land.
Moreover
, businesses are affected by losses because of delaying delivery services. More traffic congestion not only in curing noise problems, but
also
 in curing air pollution. The solutions for
this
 situation are not so simple, to discourage people from their own,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should impose higher taxes for carbon emission.
Furthermore
, laymen should
use
 car-pooling, to share his or her taxi with another citizen, owing to
this
 the rate of traffic would reduce to half.
In addition
 to the above,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should encourage citizens to
use
 public
transportation
instead
 of private vehicles. If people
use
 public
transportation
,
then
government
 should earn money, because of
this
 they can
use
this
 money to improve the condition of roads.
Also
,
government
 should advertise the advantages of bicycle, because of
this
, not only reduce influx, but
also
 the health of citizens will improve. To conclude, the
government
 should enact some stricter laws for car ownership and travel so, people can understand these problems are not as small as they think. When they pay fines,
then
 they will understand the value of public
transportation
.
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