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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children?

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In
this
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 modern world, development in medical science has proven that through vaccines, parents can save their children from common diseases like measles, chickenpox, polio. In
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 essay we will discuss about that there should be a law to immune the children or it
should be depend
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should depend
 on personal choice. Most important reason related to
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 context is false
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
 or misunderstanding about the vaccines that it is made of some substance which is not good for children's health.
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, there is a polio campaign in all over the Pakistan but some people spread a fake news about polio vaccine that it consists a substance
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 vicious for children.
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, parents do not allow their children to have vaccines for common diseases.
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, parents do not want their children to go through the painful process of vaccines.
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The government
make
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makes
 immunization mandatory
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for
 everyone. In foreign countries, it believes that immunization is the right of every child. Sometimes, due to parents negligence
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 children do not get these vaccines and regret later.
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, if it will be a personal choice of parents to immunize their children, parents will never do it and children will suffer later. Hundreds of children get affected by these common diseases and die because of not getting
vaccination
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vaccinated
 on time. I strongly agree that getting vaccines is the prime right of every child and government should raise the awareness of the issue. Parents
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 get all the information about the vaccines from their personal doctor in order to avoid any kind of misunderstanding.
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