Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

In today's
world everybody
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world, everybody
is fascinated by
glamour
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the glamour
and people associated with it is idolized everywhere. Celebrities are given huge importance and
media cash
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the media cash
in on their publicity. In
this
essay we will discuss how
media's coverage
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the media's coverage
of celebrities
have
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has
adverse effects on
younger
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the younger
generation
. In
this
modern era,
young
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younger
generation
follow
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follows
their celebrities on various platforms and try to look like them. Cosmetic surgeries have been increased 37% in recent years.
For instance
, thanks to Kardashian sisters who made Botox and other cosmetic surgeries so famous that now every young girl is ready to go under the
knife without of
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knife without
having any thought of its fatal side effects. They are ready to pay millions of rupees for
this
artificial look and
also
ready to face the side effects later in life. Another important reason is celebrities luxurious lifestyle which
make
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makes
young people inferior.
For
instance celebrities
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instance, celebrities
are famous for their extravagant lifestyle. They wear international brands and change their hair style very frequently.
Moreover
, celebrities and famous people have a new boyfriend or girlfriend in every two weeks and their frequent use of alcohol and smoking has
direct effect
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a direct effect
on the life of
young
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the young generation
generation
who follow their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
celebrities.
For instance
, Bollywood actor Salman Khan has a big fan following and
young
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a young generation
generation
is madly following him on Instagram, Facebook.
Furthermore
, children make their
parents
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parents'
parent's
life miserable to buy his
brand's
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brand
clothes. To conclude
this
essay, I strongly agree that
media
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the media
should play a responsible role in
this
regard and should not show the negative side of the celebrities. Parents
also
keep a good check on their children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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