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Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self study is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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A question on the appropriate way of studying has always been debated; where some promotes the group studying and others believe in the self studying for the students. There are valid arguments for either side,
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 my own perspective; it depends upon the individual involved and their learning capacity. On the one hand, the studying by self helps to retain the focus for a longer time period due to the limited distractions by the external sources
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 as non serious youngster in the study group. In fact, the understanding level of all the students varies which can lead to spending more duration on a single topic before moving on to the
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 subject, and
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, it can waste the time of quick learners.
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, studying on by own helps an individual to schedule their study hours, set their goals, and develops the independent abilities.
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 helps them in building responsible personality who can handle or complete any provided task.
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, the peer learning can uplift the knowledge level of the average teenagers by being a part of the study group which will encourage them to focus on the learning process.
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, it will help to develop the skills useful in the future workplace,
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 as teamwork and communication skills.
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, the round of discussions in the form of questions and answering done in the peer studying helps to fill the learning gaps and deepen the understanding of the subject. To recapitulate, I opine that the selection of the studying methods should be done depending upon the capabilities of a child and their learning abilities; where the weaker students can be made to learn the basics of subjects together, and the brilliant student can do a thorough reading by self studying.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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