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Some people believe that gap year between school and university is a good idea while other disagree strongly. Consider both side of your own opinion. You should give reason for your answer and include idea example from your own knowledge and experience.

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Now day in some countries it’s become a trend of
student
 to take
year
 break from the studies before joining
university
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the university
. It is a debatable topic as It can be helpful for some
student
 but not for all. In
this
 essay I will explain what are the advantages and disadvantages of
year
 gap. The advantages of
year
 off
from
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of
 the studies can help the
student
 in many ways. Few of them can travel the world and some of them can join an employer to work. When you travel the world, you can learn new language, culture and history of that country. For
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 one who started working for an employer can learn new skills
additionally
 they started earning
money
 which can help them to become independent. From that
money
 they can bear their regular expenses as well as their university fee
also
. In both they way
student
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a student
the student
students
 can use their entire
year
 wisely and which will be
benefit
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benefiting
benefited
for
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from
 them in future.
Furthermore
, the disadvantage of the
year
 gap for the students is that they can lose the interest from the studies and it is quite possible for them to not return
in
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to
 the college life. Travelling is not free so to travel entire world can
spent
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spend
 their all savings. If they start working for the employer, they will be
independent but
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independent, but
money
 can change their thoughts. As their mind started diverting from study to earning
money
. They can land up in
money
 trap and will not be
enter
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entering
 university again. At
last in
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last, in
 my observation above said statement is not
fill
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filled
for
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in
 all of them. It totally depends on each person’s thought whether they want a full
year
 gap or to continue their study from school to college.
Submitted by Prabhat Srivastava on

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