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Some people say that watching TV programs and movies related to crime are popular. What do you think it's popular and how does it affect to society?

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A series of telecast or films that associated with illegality has always been one of the welcomed
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topics
. Here, I would like to explore the reason why publics are intrigued by it and its possible impacts to the entire society will
also
 be discussed and elaborated in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the stories of criminality are normally unpredictable and full of excitement that enables viewers to get an adrenaline hit. Take the movie ''Zodiac'' as an example, based on the true story of the serial killer in
US
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the US
 during the period of
1960s
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the 1960s
. Most of sin scenes played in
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the show, which
the show which
shows which
 are not allowed to do in authentic life;
besides
 that, those cases are fundamentally unsettled that adding a veil of
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mystery
 on it.
Therefore
, people can indulge into the dark world of imagination through viewing a movie.
Moreover
, a number of adverse influences can be contributed by the presence of the villainy dramas.
However
, the main impact is fostering the imitation of the criminal ways because of the details that demonstrating in the footage.
For instance
, a 14
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year
 old Taiwanese teenager executed his peer by the modified gun after he lost the game. Afterwards, the juvenile confessed that he mimicked the operation from the famous clip of the TV drama, and stated that he did not like the feeling of being a loser, which is
excately
in a delicate manner
exquisitely
 the same dialogue performed in the show. In fact, these offence television broadcasts
are potentially spreading
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potentially spread
 the messages of violence and hatred into the communities.
Consequently
, the excessive watching of felony cinemas that might distort the value of morality of individuals. In conclusion, as the transgression films are not
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solely
 for
entertaiment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
, but
also
 bring many negative effects to the entire society,
in particular
 minors. People and the authority should beware of
this
 thorny issue and attach more importance on it.
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