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men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. for this reason, their jobs are better done by men and other by women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since the women start to fight for equal rights the gap between women's characteristic and abilities are almost disappeared.
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, some people think, that there are some jobs that perfectly have done by men and others by a female. From my point of view, I disagree that ability to have done a perfect
work
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 related to the sex.
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 with, in past time, where females were not allowed to hold high or management positions were finished. And women proved that they can do the same
work
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 as men, like a pilot, a military staff, a construction worker. Now women can do physical
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 together with man, as well as rule a huge company. Professionalism does not belong to a particular sex.
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, the most important factor is the
individuals'
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individual
 characteristics of humans. Usually, people can say: "
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 job not for women", which is suppressed abilities of
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women's
 rights. A good example is countries, like Russia,
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 the law forbidden to mention the sex of the applicant in a vacancy description, and well as, women
can not
can not
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 be rejected the cause of the gender. There is no job that can be done by women better that by men, and the opposite is equal. Taking everything into consideration, gender does not have a significant effect on the ability to do
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work
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the work
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, what is more important, and can be judged is a personal trait that helps people to do a great job in the right profession.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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