University students often focus on one subject. however, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Yes, Many children these days have an unhealthy
lifestyles
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lifestyle
.
For
example most
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example, most
of the children of
new generation
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the new generation
a new generation
are using mobile phones for watching videos and
palying
the act of playing a musical instrument
playing
game
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games
for hours without taking
rest
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a rest
and eventually leads to eyes and mental related problems
in earlier age
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in an earlier age
with earlier age
with with earlier age
. Some children
eats
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eat
unhealthy food like pizza, burger
,
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,
chips
etc
which affect their physical growth. Parents and
Schools
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School
teacher are not even keen to teach and learn children about these things and its impact on their
phycial
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
and mental growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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