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should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? or is it responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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Some people are of the opinion that countries and nations with more natural resources which makes them wealthier should share what they have with nations which do not have adequate wealth, while others believe that the governments of the poor countries are obligated to take
care
 of their citizens. In the following paragraphs both notions are going to be discussed. Obviously, wealthier countries have a higher and far better quality of life which makes them lucky. But taking
care
 of other nations in part of the humanity and if anybody tends to save the earth and the life on it has to
care
 about other people’s lives. While there is no obligation available to force these nations to help the others, it seems to be ethically, not only right, but
also
 reasonable to take
care
 of other human beings, regardless of race and nation. Clearly, governments play an undeniable role in protecting their citizens. But sometimes a trashy government that does not
care
 about people’s lives can endanger many valuable lives, resulting in the idea that helping in
such
 circumstances cannot make a difference. So, in case of having a healthy and suitable government, which is dealing with daily growing issues, helping will be beneficial. Totally, caring for other nations and protecting lives while providing free education for all, regardless of gender, race, and age, are vital elements in achieving sustainable development, so I truly believe that far wealthier countries are ethically obligated to help nations in need, not to mention it is part of humanity.
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