Some people work for the same organization all their working life, other thing that it is better to work for different organization.

In our
society most
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society, most
people believed that staying in the same
job
is much better than restructure it,
besides
, other people are
disagree
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disagreeing
. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss both these views.
To begin
with, Staying in the same
job
has a lot of profit for
workers
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the workers
. Most people who working for
longtime
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a long time
long time
in a company have well fixed pension, health insurance and they will not have worried about them. The manager of company always cab be trusted with more respond and
this
authority approve their salaries gradually increase.
For example
: if
someone
have been
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has been
had been
for five-year in a firm, responsibilities that have now are much more than the
first
year, or the salary that
earn
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earns
is extremely
increase
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increasing
.
In
addition if
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addition, if
someone
have had
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has had
had had
more experience about own staff, she/ he
have had
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has had
has
is having
was having
more knowledge about own skill.
Besides
, it is extremely prominent learning different skills. Nowadays, in
fast- changing world
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the fast - changing world
, workers need to be flexible. When
someone
work
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works
is working
has worked
for
longtime
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long time
in just one company who is adapted in own staff, do not be able to get more skill about own abilities. Staying in the same
job
can be tedious,
besides when
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besides, when
someone
after getting adequate experience and knowledge about a skill, altering and challenging own self will be able to be intriguing. In conclusion, staying and altering
job
depends on
person
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the person
. Some people who are in
same
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the same job
job
for all during work life and they believe that being in
this
way is safer and more reliable,
on the other
hand some
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hand, some
forks believe that interesting and challenging staff is one of the most prominent parts of
job
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the job
a job
.
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