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the crime rate nowadays is decreased compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. do you agree or disagree

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Technology is useful in various departments in
modern era
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the modern era
, and the police department is using it to track down the movements of criminals. The difficult thing to digest is robbers are learning the technology to theft the money from banks. Though, the scholars are doing research to combine the medical technique with computer science to identify the DNA of a person who involved in a murder. I agree that with the help of information it is easy to find out the criminals. In the period of nineteenth century, it is impossible to investigate the persons who violated the law, because there is no proper set up to prove the evidence of a murder, robbery or a sexual harassment. Gangsters used multiple weapons to kill innocent people and it is a challenge for the government authorities arrest them, as they cannot find out the finger prints of a particular gangster. The administrative bodies are frustrated with the gangs which are involved in the cold blooded murders and other inhuman activities. They want to develop the systems used in the offices with advanced techniques, and a number of nations improved their security system, online tracking equipments and placed video cams at city centre. The RCMP bodies are using the technology to trace out the person involved in accidents, and they are catching the drug dealers within a few days. Forensic labs are given a major priority in provinces to study methods involved in a crime scene.
therefore
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Therefore
, I hope in near future we can expect even more design plans from our scientists to reduce the crime rate.
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