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When so many people are starving to death in different parts of the world, do you think it is justifiable for any government to spend money on Space Exploration Projects? Give your views.

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Undoubtedly, many people across the globe are dying because of starvation, while the
government
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 is expanding money on Space Research Project. I believe that
authorities
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the authorities
 should prioritise the needs of humans before investing income on them. The reasons for my opinion has been elaborated in the writing as follow.
To begin
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 with, the focus of the regulatory bodies should be to spend money on providing basic needs to the people. Human
beings even
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beings, even
 in developed countries do not have access to food to eat which leads to hunger. The higher authorities are ignoring their needs. Some of them get food from the
government
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 but not all. More than 75 per cent of the world's population is malnourished. When people of the country
can not
can not
cannot
 have two times meal a day and the authorities
can not
can not
cannot
 waste amount on
such
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 issue.
Besides
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this
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, many individuals do not have the proper education and
this
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 issue require the attention of
government
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 on a priority basis. Due to lack of schooling, most of them are unemployed. They
can not
can not
cannot
 feed their families. Many researches indicate, approximately 39% of the global population
is unemployed which
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are unemployed, which
are unemployed which
 is increasing death rate rapidly.
Government
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 is the backbone of the country should,
therefore
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, channelise their funds in
this
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 direction. Rather than, wasting them on Space Exploration, which will not help for people to fight for hunger in any way. In compendium, there is no denying fact that it is the utmost responsibility of the
government
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 to address the suppressing issue of their nation before considering the issues like Space Exploration.
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