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UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Do you agree with this statement?

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 of UAE government spent in 2000 which the total budget was
AED
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 315
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. Overall, the
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 spent for social security was the most highest in
catalogies
a book or pamphlet containing an enumeration of things
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. Whereas, transport was
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spending
 less than each other. As clearly seen that
UAE government
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the UAE government
 spent
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 100
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 for social security. It
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shows
 that thing is important in
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 country. Health and personal social services just a half of social security with
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 53
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. While other expenditure was spent as same as debt interest with
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 23
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. The
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money which
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money, which
 UAE government spent for education was
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 of health and personal social services.
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 Defence was less 1
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 than other
expenditure but
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expenditure, but
 the
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 was nearly doubt transport. The
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 UAE spent
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in
 industry, agriculture and employment,
housing herritage
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housing, heritage
housing heritage
 and environment, law and order was just
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 2
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 a part which was 13, 15, 17 respectively.
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