Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from the internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these days, more and more people consider that schools are not crucial. The reason for them is technological
advancemenents
encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something
advancements
like internet from where children can study at home. I am not in agreement with
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thought
because, majority
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, because the majority
because, the majority
of pupils are nurtured there and heightened their knowledge
by
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of
teachers. It is obvious that, most students are reacting negatively towards studying at schools or other facilities. For the most parts they are prone to find relevant information about things what they are interested in with the help of internet.
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, schools for them become redundant.
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, one of the main aims of
schools
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the schools
is to nurture pupils. Because some students have unbearable character which serves as a hindrance to their studies, I think. Due to negligence to kids at home, teachers are taking the responsibility to their neck.
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, it is necessary to think about today's world where the pandemic of Coronavirus have impacted on education, but with the help of technologies it is solved. It is for short - period because it never gives enough knowledge.
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, by watching video lessons pupils
can not
can not
cannot
understand some parts of it. In order to pursue
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lesson, they need well- educated teachers, students have
chance
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a chance
the chance
to ask every question to gain more information.
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to
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, pupils are fearing from exams, so as to ace an exam they have to possess proper education. Strict teachers give them
many
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much
homework, to do them students must burn the midnight oil. From dime a dozen videos they would never pass a test for good marks. According to
recent survey
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a recent survey
recent surveys
conducted in Russia shown that, most students who have rigorous teacher have more frequency to show prosperity To conclude, despite the fact that
internet's benefit
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the internet's benefit
to
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of
education it can never replace
place
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the place
of traditional teaching style.
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