After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Majority
Suggestion
The majority
of students, who finished their tertiary education, spend a
year
in foreign countries. Others believe it
wolud
past tense of "will"
would
be effective to be employed for a
year
. I think, both thoughts are equally useful because a
year
in abroad can
Suggestion
abroad can
expand their horizons and experience can be
upsurged
a sudden forceful flow
upsurge
if they work. Most of universities follow Travel and Work strategy for their students.
However
, healthy proportion of students will probably visit foreign countries in a 1-
year
period. It can serve as a
stimuli
Suggestion
stimulus
which urge them to live or continue their master's degree in those countries. The reason for
this
the high
Suggestion
higher
living
standards
Suggestion
standard
, in my view.
For example
, people who
travels
Suggestion
travel
along the world can possess the ability to improve and expand their world view by learning
diversity
Suggestion
a diversity
the diversity
of cultures and nations, I guess. The recent survey conducted by the university of John Hopkins shown that students after having a
year
in other countries
are opt
Suggestion
is opting
opts
for continuing their academic life or setting up their business. When it comes
to spend
Suggestion
to spending
time
on working
instead
of travelling, it has some benefits too. New members of staff can heighten their experience and get some promotions if they show enthusiasm towards their job. During their working process, they are highly likely to pursue more vocational skills by some training organisation located in the very city or in abroad.
Moreover
, there is no need to separate extra
time
to visit other
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
.
In addition
to
this
, if the employee is very experienced after working some
time
and speaks in other languages fluently, there is a high level of chance of getting invited by international organisations like WBO (World's Bank Organisation) To conclude, both of
ways
Suggestion
the ways
give chance to travel along the
world whether
Accept comma addition
world, whether
by spending
time
for fun or visiting or by career related flights.
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