It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
document we will talk about the main factors that condition the
development
of
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. There are many theories about
this
factors
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factor
, and these have evolved a lot during the
last
century but
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century, but
currently there are two factors that are considered the most influential. The
first
one is the most “classic”, the family. Obviously, the family plays an important role in a child's
development
, because it is the
first
social contact that we experience, and we spend
many
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much
time with our family.
Also
, our parents and elder brother and sisters, teach us the basic social rules and it’s quite normal that small
childs
a young person of either sex
children
child's
child
try to imitate their
parents
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parents'
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
In addition
, normally it’s our family who
are
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is
in charge to impart discipline when we act wrong, and those who praise
use
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
when we act well. For
this
reason there are many people who think that the family is the main factor in a child's
development
.
On the other
hand there
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hand, there
is another theory that says that nowadays media, pop culture and friends are a more relevant factor. People that believe
this
, maintain that when children become older, they try to connect with other people outside the family environment like friends and classmates, and in order to achieve
this
, they could be influenced by common interests like pop culture, other ideas that could become more important than family values.
Also
, social media plays a very important role in a child's
development
because nowadays it’s very difficult to interact with friends without using it. The social media is a very powerful tool to communicate with many people, but
in
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on
the other
hand there
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hand, there
are many
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
, who can condition our ideas and way of thinking.
I personally
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I, personally
, think that the family is a more important factor, because affects us earlier than social media, and for
this
reason, depending of our family environment, the late factors as social media can be
canceled
(of events) no longer planned or scheduled
cancelled
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • development
  • media
  • pop culture
  • peers
  • family
  • social skills
  • beliefs
  • values
  • emotional support
  • moral guidance
  • aspirations
  • self-image
  • social development
  • value system
  • harmony
  • conflict
  • significant
  • behaviors
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