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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that these days the
environment
 improvement is crucial to maintain a healthy life and
society
. The question is, are individuals able to improve their
environment
 or
this
 role is only restricted to governmental authorities and companies? In
this
 essay I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of causes of inability of persons to act effectively and positively in their community and
environment
.
Firstly
, inability to deliver their messages to a large portion of
society
. In other hands, the lack of audience for important messages, makes these positive points useless.
Secondly
, the dependence of individuals on other authorities.
This
 is because of lack of awareness of the importance of environmental improvement on communities.
Thus
, those multiple factors make changes are difficult for persons.
However
, others claim that governments and companies can significantly affect environmental conditions. The main reason given to support the claim is that those authorities have strong economic power. To illustrate, those can provide needed manpower and other resources to achieve the target.
In other words
, Those provided resources would be resulted to clean
environment
.
Thus
, healthy community and
society
 would be the consequences of
such
 support. In conclusion,
although
 it is difficult to some extent to change
environment
 positively by a single individual, the large companies and governmental authorities could change it to better media.
Therefore
, I believe that the single person could improve the community if he or she well educated and able to deliver positive messages to
society
 as well as the companies and government able to affect the
environment
 in a good way for the resources that could provide.
Submitted by Ali Alzaher on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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