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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Cultural and historical attractions are an important aspect of any place. There has always been a debate whether or not International tourists should be charged more than the local visitors for visiting these attractions. I would say it depends on the country and how strong is the country's currency.
Firstly
, We know that the ticket revenue is very essential for the upkeep and the maintenance of the monuments and cultural attractions. But in most cases, the tickets are highly subsidised and the majority of the money is taken from our tax contributions.
Thus
, the local people are already indirectly paying for the maintenance of these places.
Secondly
, for a country like India, where the majority of tourists are from
developed
Suggestion
developing
 nations and the Indian currency being highly devalued, it makes sense to charge foreigners the non-subsidised rate which will obviously be higher than the ticket price the locals are paying.
Furthermore
, these rates seem fair to the international tourists as internationally in lots of countries the fares are not subsidised for anyone and even they pay the usual rates in their home countries.
On the other hand
, sometimes there are cases where foreigners may feel it is not fair that they are being charged more than locals.
This
 is understandable as they are not aware that these prices are highly subsidised by the taxes locals pay. Conclusively, foreigners may not like paying more than locals for visiting cultural and historical attractions of a place,
however
, if they are made aware of the
highly
Suggestion
high
highest
 tax subsidised system, they would understand.
Therefore
, I agree that it is acceptable to charge
foreigners higher
Accept comma addition
foreigners, higher
 ticket prices than local visitors.
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