Some countries sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Sports has always been a source of attraction for the common people. Most of the countries often organises games for which their nation's population is passionate about. My opinion is countries should sponsor more sports not just only to advertise

themselves but

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themselves, but

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contribute in helping the current youth generation get out of their comfort zone and be extraordinary in the field they are good at. Going little bit deeper, if

considered there

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considered, there

are many benefits of organizing games in your country.

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, it can be a good source of generating revenue. Having a home game often encourages the youth to get out and learn it.

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, In Europe, you'll often observe that, from a young child to an old age person, everyone is so passionate about football. India started its own Kabbadi league to bring awareness among Indians

for

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the games that were originated in their home country, so sometimes it's possible that games are not organised to be famous but sponsored for their own people. But

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hand there

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hand, there

are some side effects that can

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be observed. Due to

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, some people get so obsessed

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with

their home games which eventually leads into

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an increase

the increase

number

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the number

in country's mental illness.

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, sometimes due to political issues, the best performers often don't get

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a chance

the chance

to play

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games which can be considered as one of its

consequesnces

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

consequences

. In a nutshell, I would still say that games should be held in the countries to balance the flow of

economy

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the economy

, to bring awareness and to let people think that they are one, which at

end

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the end

will help countries to become famous. There are some disadvantages of

that but

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that, but

still can be taken care of if managed properly.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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