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It is said that nowadays
people
from different
countries
can buy the same
products
anywhere in the world and that leads to a strong level of similarity across the
countries
. I think the effect of
this
development
of
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the
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society is more positive than negative.
For
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the positive side, living in
the
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a
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modern society with
same
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the same
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products
surrounding us means that we can buy the
products
which are popular in other
countries
. I believe that can give
people
more choices to make and can purchase
worldwide's
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products
without going abroad. So
people
can save
their
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time and cost, but in the meantime, they can
also
enjoy the different
products
from overseas,
such
as they can eat KFC in China
instead
of flying to America to eat.
Furthermore
,
this
development
can create many jobs for local
people
. As more and more
people
turn to buying international brands, but sometimes they don't have
the
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access to buy it, so there are many buying
agent
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help
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them by delivering the
products
as their job and
this
can improve
countries
' economic
development
and increase the social employment. But everything has a downside and
countries
become
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similar to each other is not an exception.
Due to
the impact of international
products
, more and more traditional brands are facing a survival challenge. They have to produce more innovative
products
to attract customers and some of them may just vanish from the market or
purchased
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by
lager
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brands.
That is
a huge loss of cultural diversity. So in conclusion,
this
development
is inevitable in modern society and I say that we have to accept it and find a way to live with it
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  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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