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Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. What are advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

It’s common today
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, creasing
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creasing
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a growing
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 number of people who aren’t sure
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that
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whether
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is it
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it is
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 compulsory for them to
resolve
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renew
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 their driving licence
each
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every
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 5
years
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 or not
yet
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apply
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.
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 essay will discuss both sides of
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also
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supports
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support
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the
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advantages and disadvantages
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of
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.
Firstly
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, it must be
recognized
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recognised
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 as one of the principal
advantage
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advantages
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is
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that there are lots
new
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of new
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 rules
are
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introduced by the government
and
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 they all should be well-known
for
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to
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 all people. Unfortunately, nowadays not every person knows where
is
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the latest and
strongly
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strongest
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 news or
rule
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rules
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about
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are about
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the
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retaking the driving test every 5
years
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. In case
,
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this
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 environment
would bring
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brings
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 many hard accidents with humans.
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, if people pass the driving exam
each
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every
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 5
years
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, it would probably decrease the number of mishaps in our
life
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lives
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.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages
of
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this
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. I strongly appreciate that the main disadvantage
is
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will be about retaking
auto-test
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the auto-test
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follower’s
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followers’
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This
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 means every 5
years
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more
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, more
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 and more drivers retake their tests and take lots of licences. After all
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 activity brings the population number of drivers
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is updated each
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each
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every
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 5
years
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and
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, and
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 even a boy about 15-16
years
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 old can take
this
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 exam test and drive for a long
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time.
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 I mean that the main disadvantage would be
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the offended
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offended
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offence
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 of
driver
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the driver
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 who paid a lot for
government
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the government
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 and has more interests
for
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in
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 car tricks
at
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on
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streets
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the streets
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, especially
,
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 young
s
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people
. In conclusion,
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humans’
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 characters and
knowledges
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knowledge
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will play the main role in
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 way.
However
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, it is
more safety
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safer
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in multiplying
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to multiply
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of retaking auto tests
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such
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, such
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 as during a short
of
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apply
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period
and
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, and
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 I strongly believe that it will decrease the
numbers
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number
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 of
many
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accidents.

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task
Be clear. State your main view in the first paragraph and stay with it in all the main ideas.
language
Use one idea per sentence and keep sentences short.
task
Explain the idea you give. Add a simple example.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together, like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'however'.
language
Check grammar and spell wrong forms. Read aloud.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the topic.
structure
It has a clear start, middle and end.
coherence
There are some good links with 'First' and 'On the other hand' words.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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