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Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to an audience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. . do you agree or disagreed

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Some of people cannot perform on stage or to talk with
other person
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other people
the other person
 in front of.
Such
 people
more closely
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closer
, not gullible and shy. Why they are shy with others and why they are not
trust
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trusting
to
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of
 others? It is beginning from childhood, when children were taught not to argue, not to speak loudly, that it was shame and shame, when they were not allowed to express their opinions. Simply
such
 children can not tell with
public
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the public
. So we will teach
they
objective case of they
them
 describe
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 opinion, teach to
trust
 others and
trust
 with theirs and proud theirs.
Such
 people were grown without love, care and secure. If see around can will see that
child which
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child, which
 grew in love will more confident, stable and focused. Decision
this
 problem stayed at school exactly with parents and teachers. Parents
must to love
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must love
 and care. Teachers must
do not
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do, not
 so critical with their children and
must to find
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must find
 the way to
they
of them or themselves
their
 heart. I
trust
 that if we will kind with each other and they
also
 will
kindfull
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kind full
 and more confident with others.
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